melrose, I won't answer your japanese grammar question, although I'm certain that considering the whole sentence, setsunaku te is describing the nights.
but as for your suggestions to the english:
"it" I think is ok, "that" wouldn't be used so soon after saying the thing you are referring to....in this case "this" might be best....i.e.
"I myself feel embarrassed about this"
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casually exchange is definitely the best choice here....mostly because "every word that you casually speak to me" wouldn't normally be used in english, "every word that you casually say to me" sounds better, BUT
exchange implies that they are talking to each other, and that it is a two way conversation....it makes sense to me that she would treasure what he said in these conversations, I mean, he's actually talking with her!!!!! not just saying something at her...
MOST importantly though, Ayu says so!!! >.<
Kawashite translates as "exchange".
I'd stick with exchange.
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masa, I'm definitely not good at japanese, but in the english, I can't see how the "though" in stanza 5 fits with stanza 4.
there's nothing in stanza 4 that would require a "though" in stanza 5. If anything, a "so" would make more sense. making it more of the form 'because of (4), so (5).'
or even an "and"...
"and it's true I spend...."
If you think the keredo modifies both stanzas, maybe to make it work in english will have to use 2 words...one at the start one at the end...
using your transaltion we'd get:
Quote:
I've known for a long time that you have someone precious
Because it's clear from your smile
and it's true I spend some nights
Feeling so sad, so sad
And feeling a tightning in my chest, though...
** If I just think of you
My heart has the meaning to live
I expect nothing special from you
Can I stay loving you forever
Just like this?
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the "and" links the painful nights etc. to stanza 4, implying that stanza 4 is the reason for them. the "though" links (5) to (6) meaning that even
though she has painful nights...thinking of him can give her heart the meaning to live ...etc...
this might not be a direct transaltion, but if you think keredo links 4 to 5 and 5 to 6, then this might be the best way to realise that in english...
what do you think?