[romaji and translation] GREEN

[extepan]

thanks for the translation!

[AyUmIXx]

yea pls stop the comparison..
we never know exactly what's Ayu trying to say on her lyric... unless you're Japanese...
so thanks to Masa who has give his 100% effort in translation for us which is already great! i love Masa's translation

[tokage-chan]

Banzai! GREEN lyricsXD Arigatou^_^

[simonlau]

thank you masa for the translation

[fuawas]

soo beautiful!!
they're really great!
thanks ^^

[kirei_ayumi]

her lyrics to this song is too beautiful. thanks for sharing.

[edgefusion]

They're okay I suppose, a little cookie-cutter now. She's done much much better in the past.

[otsukachieko]

uwaaa... this is soo beautiful *___*
i'm shivering when i read it =__= ~~
thx for sharing...!!!

[kendelle]

What beautiful lyrics! Thanks so much for sharing them with us all, masa~!! ^_^

[PoetGirl]

thanks for translation. beautiful lyrics

[ストロボ・EdGE]

I don't know if someone already posted the Japanese here but:

光り輝いて凛とした木々たちが
身を隠すように色を消していく
希望へつながる何もかもを遠ざけて
ぬくもりを怖がる私のように

あの人の笑顔がもう
眩しくて優しすぎて
弱さ見せてしまいそうで
泣き出してしまいそうで

☆触れた指の先から
想いが溢れ出しそうに
なったあの瞬間から
この恋に気付きました

どうして人は心のままに従い
歩いていくのが難しいのだろう

本当はきっとずっと
わかってたはずなのにね
現実に目をそむけた
真実を否定してた

★見つめるその先には
愛しいあの人の姿
風が変わる頃には
この想い伝えようか

☆★

再び芽吹いた木々たちが色付いたら
今より素直な笑顔見せたい

[taskinillusion]

This song is so fresh and amazing. <3 Thank you so much for the translation!

[Melrose]

I want him to see my smile

Shouldn't the him's be removed? She (almost?) never talks about a him or her but speaks in general or about a you. And with the PV it's not even sure she's talking about a him or her so I think that changing it would it better. ^^ What do you think masa?

[masa]

Ima yori sunao na
Egao mise tai

It's true that she doesn't say in this part that she wants to show her smile to "him". But this is a love song to a particular person, and I think it's unnatural to interprete that she wants to show her smile to "everyone". So I added "him" to my translation.

[Melrose]

Originally Posted by masa

Ima yori sunao na
Egao mise tai

It's true that she doesn't say in this part that she wants to show her smile to "him". But this is a love song to a particular person, and I think it's unnatural to interprete that she wants to show her smile to "everyone". So I added "him" to my translation.

Hmm, okay. But I think you should consider just leaving it out. For any song it's strange to put in a word that isn't really there, and with this song especially it's strange as it's not necessarily directed at a male person.

You can say 'I want to show my smile' without meaning specifically everyone and him. it gets the idea across.

[maikaru]

Originally Posted by Melrose

Hmm, okay. But I think you should consider just leaving it out. For any song it's strange to put in a word that isn't really there, and with this song especially it's strange as it's not necessarily directed at a male person.

You can say 'I want to show my smile' without meaning specifically everyone and him. it gets the idea across.

In japanese songs, they almost never actually say "him."
It's so weird to say that one.

But it's faithful to the song.
She is a woman, she is Ayumi Hamasaki, and we know she is singing to a boy.
And she mentions in the beginning how his smile is so sparkles and kind
So I think its better to say "to him", because it loses the comparison if you dont... =\

[vuong22]

thanks so much

[emi♡]

^Melrose understands what happened and so does everyone else. It was something of a misunderstanding.

There was no need for you to bring it up at all. Agreeing with Deli is fine, but singling him out, is rude. It's over, and it's not like he kept doing it or anything. He even sent masa a PM about it. A big chunk of your very long post in unnecessary.

but anyway...
Thank you for your new version. The English does flow very well, but I think you should be careful if you move away from the literal translation, of how you structure it. I think it would look and sound better if some things weren't in four line stanzas.

But that's just my opinion.

[Beauty4123]

the lyrics are really great! thanks!

[masa]

To: Melrose
OK. I take your suggestion.

I want him to see my smile --> I want to show my smile