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7th January 2009, 06:01 PM
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I like the other translation more lol, the choice of words is more powerful. "planning on going on" etc isn't nice
And you really shouldn't place just "suck your thumb?" on the 4th line, but add "while you" in front of it. Otherwise it will look weird Last edited by Melrose; 7th January 2009 at 06:04 PM. 
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