[romaji & translation] blossom

[GRACE]

masa, hun, I thank you for your efforts but man your English makes no sense whatsoever.

Originally Posted by masa

Actually, you had long been crying in your heart, hadn't you?
placement of the word "long" doesn't make sense in English
But you were hiding it, that's what you haven't changed in
The second half of this sentence, grammatically I don't think you need the "in" but I don't know how that affects the translation.


You were smiling, just at the moment we could meet, weren't you?
First comma is unnecessary, semicolon should go before "weren't you"
I'm sure it was your sweet lie and the pretension to be strong with all your might

We always knew, we have never had a day where we forgot
never should come before "have" grammatically. again, don't know how that affects the translation, but it doesn't change the meaning of the sentence
We don't have to know the meaning of becoming an adult

* Because we started to walk, and we don't need a reason for that
the comma is unnecessary
Because we know at least that we are just OK, we are OK now
"at least" and "just" mean the same thing in this sentence

I know painfully, your feelings are reaching me without change
should be "painfully know" the adverb ALWAYS comes before the verb. The comma isn't necessary either
Because our promise that we would share everything is not a lie at all
This makes no sense, should it be "Because OF our promise"? The "that" is also unnecessary

Just as we have protected the naturally-colored flower petals together
We will gently see them through together until the last one falls

** And we started to walk, hand in hand still in an unfamiliar way
should be another comma after "hand in hand" grammatically.
Now we have taken a step forward, and this moment will change the future

* (repeat)
** (repeat)

comments in bold, just speaking from an English grammar prespective. Dunno how the translation affects what you wrote, but nothing I commented on would change the actual meaning of any of these sentences.

[C+R+E+AYUMI]

Originally Posted by GRACE

masa, hun, I thank you for your efforts but man your English makes no sense whatsoever.

isn't it a little rude to say?
Masa it's pretty open minded about corrections, you could simply help him in a kind way suggesting your opinion.

And please consider that japanese it's really hard to translate keeping the original meaning.

[Kanzaki]

Originally Posted by C+R+E+AYUMI

isn't it a little rude to say?
Masa it's pretty open minded about corrections, you could simply help him in a kind way suggesting your opinion.

And please consider that japanese it's really hard to translate keeping the original meaning.

I'd say so too. That was kinda disrespectful.

[masa]

I add or delete a comma like this, according to GRACE's suggestion.
(line3) You were smiling just at the moment we could meet, weren't you?
(line7) Because we started to walk and we don't need a reason for that
(line13) And we started to walk, hand in hand, still in an unfamiliar way
And I'm now thinking that "still in a kind of unfamiliar way" might be better.

As for the first and second lines, I think Mitkki's suggestion is good again.
Within your heart, you've actually been crying for a while haven't you?
But you were hiding it, that part of you hasn't changed.

As for the line 14, I add "certainly" (because I forgot to translate "tashika ni" into English), and change "just" to "simply" like this.
Because we certainly know at least that we are simply OK, we are OK now
But if it still sounds odd to you, please post your opinion here.

(line 5) Itsu datte wakatte ta ne wasureta hi wa nakatta yo ne
I still think that this line consists of two different senteneces (lacking of objects), and that it's very hard to interprete that [wasureta hi wa nakatta yo ne] is the object of [wakatte ta ne].

[Mitkki]

Originally Posted by masa

(line 5) Itsu datte wakatte ta ne wasureta hi wa nakatta yo ne
I still think that this line consists of two different senteneces (lacking of objects), and that it's very hard to interprete that [wasureta hi wa nakatta yo ne] is the object of [wakatte ta ne].

yeah I wasn't really sure about that line either. hehe.
I'd love to offer my own translation but my comprehension of nuances in Japanese is still very lacking, so an attempt to edit preexisting translation efforts is the limit of my ability. Thanks for considering them.